When
I received this novel I was very excited. The premise of the story is
that a woman that is struggling with family stumbles across a goblet
that once belong to Jesus. Although a powerful tool given to her to use
by God, she finds a darker force trying to stop her.
This is a
good story. It has a lot of potential. Unfortunately, I feel Sylvia
didn't meet that. She writes that she started writing in High School and
was encouraged by her English teacher. It seems to me that
encouragement made her believe she was ready to publish this story.
Personally, I think this is okay for a first draft, but had the chance
to be tapped much further with considerable revision.
I also do
not find Sylvia Patzold's writing strong. The character development was
shaky. We do see changes in the characters because of the goblet, but
they are quickly explained in a sentence and not elaborated on. This is
akin to "show me, don't tell me."
We have a very strong point in
writing this novel, which is wonderful. It is obviously very driven by a
belief in God and the power in that.
We barely touch on setting
in this novel. I assume this is so we can imagine any family. This
leaves us with mostly dialogue and description actions and not many
"inner thoughts."
Because I find Sylvia's story ideas strong, I
would recommend her as an author as she learns to show the story more
instead of telling.
When it comes to The Goblet?
Go Ahead and Burn It.
Note: I received this book free from the author. The review was my opinion and was not required to be a positive review.
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